Parsing the "transportation product liability" text, example 4
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4. Why are the FMVSS's inadequate if so much input is allowed? The answer is simple: lobbying. In the past 20 years, there's been far too much industry lobbying, such that the vehicle industry has incredible influence over the NHTSA (National Highway Transportation Safety Administration). In fact, lobbying efforts by the former NHTSA administrators on behalf of the vehicle industry has become the rule, not the exception.
4a. I like this paragraph and can find little to critique. Just a few tweaks.
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4. Why are the FMVSS's inadequate if so much input is allowed? The answer is simple: lobbying. In the past 20 years, there's been far too much industry lobbying, such that the vehicle industry has incredible influence over the NHTSA (National Highway Transportation Safety Administration). In fact, lobbying efforts by the former NHTSA administrators on behalf of the vehicle industry has become the rule, not the exception.
4a. I like this paragraph and can find little to critique. Just a few tweaks.
Suggestion:
- Why are the Standards inadequate if so much input is allowed? The answer is simple: lobbying. In the last 20 years, there's been far too much industry lobbying, to the point that the vehicle industry has incredible influence over the National Highway Transportation Safety Administration. In fact, lobbying for industry interests by former Administration employees is now the rule, not the exception.
Wayne Schiess
Director of Legal Writing | The University of Texas School of Law | Website | Seminars | Articles | Books: Preparing Legal Documents Nonlawyers Can Read and Understand
| Better Legal Writing
| Writing for the Legal Audience
| The Legal Memo: A Basic Guide
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